添削前/Before Correction

My dream is slipping through my finger. But I still have the present moment to strive for changing my future.

添削後/After Correction

My dream is slipping through my fingers. But I can still use the present moment to build the future I want.

夢が手からこぼれ落ちていっている。でも、掴みたい未来を築くために、まだ今この瞬間を使うことができる。

メモ

◆strive for の後は基本的に名詞。She strives for excellence for everything. She strives for perfection even in small tasks.

◆build the future I want 代替: work towards my future

◆finger は fingers